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PostSubject: Hero Critisizm   Sat Sep 19, 2009 6:37 pm

I really want to get my new hero to look as good as possible, so i came here!

Here he is Masked and Unmasked.
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Sep 19, 2009 6:45 pm

First one!
I will assign your tutors now.
They will be...
Squigfly and I

Now for the critique...
I notice you have been pumping out alot of micros recently, and they all of somewhat of the same deal. They are all tights wearing superheroes. I'm not saying that's bad, but take a look out how some of my micros that wear tights are done. I give little folds in each area that should have a crease. Slow down on your micros and really work on making each one original and great. I do like the colors you have chosen for your character. I don't know if this is on purpose, but the chest looks like owl eyes, which looks pretty cool.

Overall, I'll give this micro a...
B

Work on spending more time on each micro you make and they will all look better.

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Sep 19, 2009 6:49 pm

It looks like owl eyes, because i based that part of the chest from Dr. Impossible, and i thought it was cool myself. May i ask what you mean by the folds in each area? I don't really understand that part. Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Sep 19, 2009 6:52 pm

Okay, here...

See how on his elbows around his armpits and waist, try adding little creases.
However, don't copy from this one...
It helps your micros from looking plain.

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Sep 19, 2009 7:05 pm

I tried to fix it on the Unmasked one.
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Sep 19, 2009 7:07 pm

Looks better, however yours go down at somewhat of a diagonal. Remember you want it to look 3D, so make the fold go with the contour of each part.
Take a closer look at mine to get an idea.

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sun Sep 20, 2009 6:39 am

Mach has a good point, and I think I'll give it a B-

My first advice would be that you make the hair yourself. And like mach said add more folds. If you are looking to go onto an A or A* grade I'd advise you to use four or five shades and anti-analyse your micro.

Also the shadow shading underneath the hair looks pillowed, and the nose and mouth area look quite flat. Add more shading there to make it look more realistic. Also I'd say make the mouth a bit smaller.

Also I think that the puprle line above the feet is too diagonol, so you should make it straighter.

With the masked version I'd say the mask looks very flat, so try to add a nose line or something if you get what I mean. Also the mask looks too long and pointy at the bottom.

All together though it is a pretty good micro, but if you take in to consideration what we've said I think it could be improved a lot.

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sun Sep 20, 2009 9:09 pm

Here's my semi-fixed version. Not to happy with the shading under the waist, but, it looks pretty good i guess. Razz And to Squigfly, the boots are diagonal because they're meant to be that way. Wink
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Mon Sep 21, 2009 3:54 am

Well you've definatley improved it a lot.

However I think the nose is too flate still, add some shading to it. And maybe use a bigger gap between the shades of purple you use, but not too big.

Otherwise great job, it really looks better

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Mon Sep 21, 2009 9:40 am

Took that advice Squig, and thanks, hopefully the nose still doesn't look too flat on this one. The color difference here is also at a good distinction, and makes him look quite good.
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Mon Sep 21, 2009 12:01 pm

nice it looks a lot better

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Thu Sep 24, 2009 6:25 pm

That looks a lot better!!!
I'll give it a...
B+
That's just because it's a regular body temp and nothing really stands out.
If you added some other things like boots or gloves that extend past the outline of the body, who knows?

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Fri Sep 25, 2009 3:51 am

Also try making the hair yourself. That is still Shinobus hair, isn't it?

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Fri Sep 25, 2009 10:07 am

It is, but until i am more experienced with hair, and i have more time (My hair is in layers and might take quite a while). I might start on it this weekend.
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Thu Oct 29, 2009 6:42 pm

If you want I could make the basic design
and you could shade all of it in.
Or I can post a tutorial on the burger way of making hair!
Get back to me on that
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Fri Oct 30, 2009 4:58 pm

Johnny posted this awhile back. I think he's sorted it now

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:18 pm

oh, gracias squig!
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Fri Nov 13, 2009 11:41 pm

Okay, I need some more help.

I made hair by myself, but have been told that it needs to look more textured. But in reality, my hair doesn't have much volume.

Here is what I have,

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Nov 14, 2009 10:01 am

look at the hair on you avi, it needs to be more like that, at the moment it looks too flat

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Nov 14, 2009 3:00 pm

When I do try that, it ends up looking too fluffy. o.o
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Nov 14, 2009 4:36 pm

well I'd suggest you do it anyway and post it, then I'll see how I can help improve the fluffy one. Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Nov 14, 2009 6:13 pm



Lol..
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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sat Nov 14, 2009 10:13 pm

Think about where the strands of hair originate from, that wiill help instead of randomly placing strands

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Sun Nov 15, 2009 6:42 am

it looks slightly better, but like mach said, think about the strands

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PostSubject: Re: Hero Critisizm   Fri Nov 20, 2009 9:30 pm

Okay, for that hair, I just said Screw It. It was inaccurate anyways.

So then me and my friend started making probably the most accurate hair i've EVER made for myself, (Slightly referenced from RAW over at MIB)



I think this is the best that i've done so far. Very Happy
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